For creative writing, Joyce Carol Oates got it right when she advised, “Be daring, take on anything.”
But when you are trying to make a good first impression on your future boss, concision and confidence sets a qualified applicant apart from one who doesn’t sound sure of her own experience.
It’s easy to use these common fluff phrases in writing that’s trying too hard to impress. Read your work out loud, and these meaningless filler words will reveal themselves; then, it’s time to start cutting.
Using “I think” or “I believe” weakens statements. “For these reasons, I believe I would be a great fit at your company.” If you only think you’re right for the job, why should the hiring manager be convinced? Owning your words is intimidating if you’re used to softening every phrase, but it isn’t pushy–it’s an exercise in clarity.
Similar to “I think,” feeling something in writing makes your message weak. “I feel confident in my abilities” becomes “I am confident.” And hey, you sound confident!
The reader knows you’re naming a city from the context and doesn’t need to be told: “I moved to
the city of San Francisco.” Add the state if the city isn’t well known, rather than padding with filler words.
Similar to the place-name padding above, saying you were hired at your last job “in the month of November” or in “the year 2010” doesn’t add anything expect for a road block to getting to the point.
These good-intentioned words show up in writing like verbal tics. Omit them, and the meaning stays the same while strengthening your writing backbone. “I’m very enthusiastic about data entry,” and “I’m enthusiastic about data entry,” mean the same thing.
Saying you’ve “never been more excited to apply” or “have always wished for this opportunity” seems insincere and probably isn’t true. Don’t exaggerate with absolutes, but don’t be tempted to replace them with “often” or “sometimes,” either. Omit the word altogether, and see if the phrase still holds up.
This word is fat and lazy, and takes up precious space where a more specific word can work harder. “There are several things in my experience I’d like to note.” Like what? Replacing “things” with meaningful abilities leaves a lasting impression. Don’t tell the reader that there are “things,” tell them what those things are.
If it’s a fact, state it. Simple as that.
Don’t stop at “really” and “very.” Channel your inner Hemingway: Hunt down adverbs and cut them ruthlessly. A phrase like “I eagerly await your response and appreciate your attention to my application” becomes, “Thank you for your time.”
Jargon has its place in industries that rely on technical know-how. Clichés, however, are white noise: The reader glazes over whole phrases (“in my wheelhouse,” “detail-oriented,” “team player with a track record of success”) and your material is dulled by dead spots. Ask yourself what you mean by “dynamic leader,” and then say it, straightforward.